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Wednesday, January 19, 2011
Volunteering for Adult Literacy
9:27 PM | 
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The I.I. |
This blog thread posted by the Irving Inquisition uses some explicit language, as well as depicting some aspects of life in North Minneapolis that some readers may find objectionable. Reader discretion is advised.
Volunteering for Adult Literacy
Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention please? It is true; Americans are indeed falling behind the rest of the world’s developed nations in terms of education. Since the subject of education is something that pretty much everyone can get behind, how do we make it better so that we can catch up?
Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention please? It is true; Americans are indeed falling behind the rest of the world’s developed nations in terms of education. Since the subject of education is something that pretty much everyone can get behind, how do we make it better so that we can catch up?
Naturally, improving our educational institutions is the key. In that perfect world that many of us starry eyed liberals dream of, there would be improved facilities, greater resources, improved budgets, and better pay for teachers. Back to reality; that obviously isn’t the case, and as a result, many pupils fall behind and exit the system ill prepared for life as an adult. But wait, there’s a solution to that too. We can help improve basic skills of disadvantaged adults; such as literacy, just by giving a little bit of our time.
As a blogger, I feel obligated to help my brethren writers in need. Therefore I have identified… (Long uncomfortable pause) IBNN….. News… Yikes!.. Yes, this blog is an excellent candidate for some charity in the form of literary assistance from the Irving Inquisition. Let this be known, this is a gift to IBNN’s blogger, Donald W.R. Allen II; free of charge.
Look at the two images of the most recent IBNN posting please. The red circles are syntax errors, which I will correct in the order they were circled. The lines highlighted in yellow, indicate an issue with the content, which I will also correct.
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| Donald W.R. Allen the 2nd's IBNN News blog, posting for 01-19-2011, page #1 |
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| Donald W.R. Allen the 2nd's IBNN News blog, posting for 01-19-2011, page #2 |
Syntax errors:
1. “want” – Should be “wants” because the context is plural.
2. “White” – Should be “white” because the word is not a proper noun.
3. “Black” – Should be “black” because the word is not a proper noun.
4. “City” – Should be “city” because the word is not a proper noun.
5. “City” – Should be “city” because the word is not a proper noun.
6. “Civil” – Should be “civil” because the word is not a proper noun.
7. “Rights” – Should be “rights” because the word is not a proper noun.
8. “Members” – Should be “members” because the word is not a proper noun.
9. “Mayor” – Should be “mayor” because the word is not a proper noun.
10. “White” – Should be “white” because the word is not a proper noun.
11. “Only” – Should be “only”; do not capitalize adverbs unless starting a sentence.
12. “White” – Should be “white” because the word is not a proper noun.
13. “Black” – Should be “black” because the word is not a proper noun.
14. “ “ – Missing a comma.
15. “planning a building strategic…” – should say “planning to build a strategic…”
16. “ “ – Missing a comma.
17. “Azul7” – I don’t know what this is supposed to be; I just know this is wrong.
18. “ “ – Missing a comma.
19. “group, who holds…” – group holds…
20. “ “ – Missing a comma.
21. “Lilly” – Should be “lily” because the word is not a proper noun.
22. “Negros” – Should be “blacks” or “African American”; to fit with contemporary and normative cultural acceptance of racial designations, and because the word is not a proper noun and should be lower case should the originally used word remain in the statement.
23. “ “ – Missing a comma.
24. “ “ – Missing a comma.
25. “ “ – Missing a comma.
26. “ “ – Missing a period.
27. “Blacks” – Should be “blacks” because the word is not a proper noun.
28. “constituents and rather” – Add a period after “constituents”, remove “and” and capitalize “Rather”.
29. “-“ – Remove the hyphen and replace with quotations since you are attempting to quote somebody.
30. “Burn it down!” – Remove quotations in front of “Burn” because you already started an attempted quote.
31. “ “ – Missing a period.
32. “more” – Use “More” for starting a new sentence, see line #31.
33. “Civil” – Should be “civil” because the word is not a proper noun.
34. “Rights” – Should be “rights” because the word is not a proper noun.
35. “Black” – Should be “black” because the word is not a proper noun.
36. “ “ – Missing a comma.
37. “City” – Should be “city” because the word is not a proper noun.
38. “ “ – Missing a comma.
Content errors:
1. Backup your statement about the DFL’s attempts to takeover Minneapolis Public Schools.
2. Show evidence that civil rights for voting are in jeopardy.
3. Please explain how municipal politics surrounding Minneapolis Public School boards equates to the revival of Jim Crow laws.
4. Your statement is erroneous by declaring there is NO diversity on the city council when your article acknowledges the presence of at least one woman and at least one African American.
5. Using exotic metaphors for adjectives attached to racial designations is generally considered to be taboo in contemporary news articles, persuasion papers, editorials, or research papers.
6. How does the ethnic and racial makeup relate to the city council’s ability to manage the public school system?
7. Cite your source when stating what someone else said, especially if you were not the person recording the statement.
8. How does North High School and statements supposedly made about it relate to a city council member’s race?
9. Seeking to have a menagerie of people in positions of power based purely on their biological and ethnic makeup as an alternative to the democratic process from which said officials achieved their ascendancy is fascinating. Please provide more information, is this a new form of fascism or monarchy you are proposing?
10. Why would the city consider the presence of poverty in any form to be a success?
One last thing… Refrain from using pornography when blogging, it gives people the impression that you may be a pervert. You’re not a pervert, are you? Hopefully this will help you out. Feel free to come see me after class if you have any additional questions.
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16 comments:
Yeah, Don Allen The Turd is always writing crap filled with capitalized nouns, as though what he's writing is full of Such Important Stuff. (Sarcastic capitalization font)
It's more a sign of his psychological state--delusions of grandeur--than poor education. In other words, I don't blame Don Allen's teachers, I blame Don Allen's ego, which no doubt was influenced by coke binges during some of his formative years.
@ Anon 9:42,
Don Allen went on coke binges back in the day? Fascinating. Perhaps staying in school isn't enough? Perhaps further investigation into persons of interests' drug usage may be warranted.
Hey II! Terry Yza#$%^ was arrested for drug possession back in the 80s. Check it out.
My oh my there is alot of slanderous statements coming from you, mr. correctness pervert. i am knowing that you are gay and lash out in anger because of it since you have no idea allen sent the posts related. you are also a racist who should worry about Black people beating the hell out of him. I do NOT envy you, mr perving inquisition.
Did this guy even graduate from high school?
@ Anon 7:00 / Don Allen,
You're really struggling with this, aren't you? You can dish it out but can't seem to take it. Perhaps you should seek professional help to assist you with your inferiority complex.
Hey I.I., just for fun, you should now do a similar grammar/spelling/punctuation correction on a JHG post.
Something tells me it would be quite similiar.
:-)
II, you missed an error under the picture: "Jungle Fever doens't count"
@ Anon 10:54,
That particular case could be debatable. I didn't count it as an error because "Jungle Fever" is the title of a movie, which of course is a proper noun. Considering the context of how it was being presented, it seemed logical to me to conclude that it was being used in that context.
On the other hand you maybe right... Fortunately for me, I'm not an English professor. If I were, I probably would have flagged even more errors that I don't have the ability to spot right now.
I think Anon 10:54 is pointing out that "doesn't" is spelled "doens't" in the picture caption.
You're right. I missed that one.
Don Allen must be a pervert, someone should email his wife. so she knows his blog promotes porn. His used of busty, playboy looking girls can also be seen on his "other" blog.
Also, I see he has changed a number of things that you pointed out as errors - congrats for getting through to him. It is so funny, these blog trolls (and JHG) poke fun at everyone's weight vs. debating them on the facts. They make up lies and promote their anti-revitalization agenda.
Don Allen, run back to the suburban home on Huset Pkwy that your wife owns and take care of her. Stop trying to pretend you are as smart as she is and accept your role as the tall, dumb and "kept" man.
Donny Allen is not very smart, but do not underestimate him. He is bipolar and possibly schizophrenic. Be very careful when dealing with him! Please, trust me, he has and will hurt someone again.
I believe you have made a gross misjudgement on your diagnosis. Mr. Allen is not to be played with by any means. I, perhaps, will suggest to you that you are continuing on a very dangerous path. Mr. Allen will wait for his adversaries to come floating down the river because he shall be standing on the shore watching. General T.
@ Anon 9:28,
Umm, yeah.... You're talking about a con man, crook, hustler, pathological liar, and mooch. I'm inclined to disagree with you.
@9:28, a.k.a. Donny: In order to be dangerous, Donny, you need to have friends. Too bad that you've burned all your bridges by bad-mouthing all the successful poverty pimps in town for the past decade, just because you're jealous of them. It must really suck about now. :-(
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